Please comment of my Poem ?

Question: Please comment of my Poem !?

Last night I came up with a very dramatic piece of prose, but forgot it!. So this morning I dug up one of my less dramatic works and have decided to share it with you experts, in hopes of some very useful tips!.

I'd like to explain the work first so you "get it"!. I've found it's easier to comment if you can actually understand what you've read!.

Anyway it's about a very nice guy, who is angry because everytime he falls in love he blinks incessantly!. He, the nice guy, now trips into Like, to avoid involuntary stuff!.

the really nice guy
tripped and fell - but didn't blink
like is what he found

Okay, now you can comment and stuff!. Thanks!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

In line two, where you mention the unfortunate fall of the hero, a well placed "smacked his moose-knuckle on the edge of the cabinet door" would go a long way in solidifying this poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Thank you for your piece
It very nice & I enjoyed the explanation but what did he trip & fall into!? Like!?

The really nice guy
Tripped & fell to ground
But didn't blink
Like is what he found

Sorry if my suggestion offended you!. No offense meant!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it a lot!. it tells a whole story without having to say much!. didn't blink once while i read it, either!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Um, I think if you must explain the meaning prior to sharing the actual poem it probably needs a little work!. Nice try by a nice guy!? Keep working at it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow, that is deep man, it touched my soul!

It almost sounds like something that would be on the cover of a VHS to describe a movie!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

poem is nice
the guy is nice
glad he found like
i think i go fly a kite!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The tears make me blink!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Just thinking about him makes my eyes water!.
I wish I can find Like one day so I can do stuff to it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

way beyond me /i couldnt write anything as bad as thatWww@QuestionHome@Com

NOW THAT"S a full grown poem!.!.!.!.!.!.!.I like!.!.!.LikeWww@QuestionHome@Com

That's just too sad!.!.* runs away crying like Guido!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Scary!.!.!.people who don't blink are scary!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love it! and I'm so happy he didn't blink!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Pmsl!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.well what can i say!.!.!.i'm gobsmacked!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.xWww@QuestionHome@Com