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Question: Would like comments please on my poem!?
How you doing today!?
hope your feeling fine,
would love to hear
what you dream of,
would love to tell
you mine!.

I don't know
but I guess we're
much the same,
feeding on the good times,
laughing off the pain!.

Putting on performance
as we close the sanctuary door,
shielding true emotions,
for the bread of daily chore!.

But how you doing today!?
I hope your feeling fine,
I'm send love,
please send it back
life's a moment
and not all time!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
how good to read new poetry
without that selfish dread
of gloom and doom thats written
and the !.!."wishing I was dead!.!.!."!.
you have at last put into words
the way we mostly feel
the ups the downs the simple joys
the spinning of the wheel
just living!.!.!.!.
and asking us about ourselves!.!.!?
!.!.!.!.!.unheard of sentiment!.!.!.
well I for one am pleased you asked
Im happy and content!.!!.!.
thank youWww@QuestionHome@Com

Beautiful sentiment, well written and open!. love it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A call for help!.You should get out more!. Join the Army!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice but the last verse does not work!. `I',m send' in particular is clumsyWww@QuestionHome@Com

to be honest with u thats a decent poem!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its a decent poem!. i can show u some of mine my emails sensitive_emma@ymail!.co!.ukWww@QuestionHome@Com