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Question: Do u like my poem-please read!?
im a huge fan of poe,so i decided 2 write my own version of Annabel Lee (1 of my favs)!.tell me if it is good and did i do the poem justice!.

A angels's sin

Created by the man above,
to give love and not be loved!.
To watch the pure,
and make things sure!.

I his blessing and he my curse,
we only wanted each other most!.
We formed a love to be put on high,
that God himself couldnt untie!.

From the envy of the angels above,
that couldnt touch our love!.
seprated me and he,
stealing every memory from me!.

Now theres nothing more to see,
but heaven and me!.
This is my story,of a
ANGEL'S SINWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i like it, but you did not really explain the tittle through it!.
like someone above said, write 4 more lines!:) please, keep on writting you have a lot of talent!

please mine!? i want opinions from other writters!

thank you:DWww@QuestionHome@Com

Stanza 3

L3 and L4 need a little work

Stanza 4

The ending didnt do anything for the poem!. I think it was pretty strong and then the end was a little weak!. I would work on the last 4 lines!. Just an opinionWww@QuestionHome@Com

Good!. Its AN angels sin though!.


AWESOME ! BRAVO! :) *HEARTS*Www@QuestionHome@Com

Awwww :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow its really goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

wow that's good!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I liked it a lot it's pretty deep!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com