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What do you think, any comments welcome!?
For every moment and every tear!. For every smile and every glare!. For the broken hearts and said they'd last!. For you and me and the time that past!.
Remember what you told me, you promised that you cared!. I screwed up and you gave up and now there's nothing there!.
I wish I could take this back, change it all for you!. I know you think it's over but I'll try like hell and hope to make it through!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
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For a first attempt not shabby!. When you write, read it over, see how it feels and sounds!. With time and effort you can turn your work into real art!.
When I was 15 I wrote weird and moody dark poetry for the most part and silly stuff!.
I still work at trying to make my poetry alive to the senses and short enough to keep ones attention yet long enough to have some meat to them!.
Keep learning and growing and do not let constructive criticism be any thing other than what it is a tool to make you better!
Wow thats absolutely amazing i cant believe you're 15!!!
Definately keep it up
Very very good :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Gosh wonderful!.!.!. venting hurt or feelings into words is a gift and also very therapeutic for the mind and heart !.!.!.well done !.!.!.
Thats very nice!. Emotional and deep!. I only wish i had talent like that at my age!.!.!. you have something special!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Really good ^_^ I love sad poems!. Fantastic coming from a fifteen year old!. Keep writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
wow that's simply beautiful!
its really goodWww@QuestionHome@Com