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Okay well I've just started to write poems and this is my first poem and I've decided to do it about friends!. Please like write back, say if you liked it or if you have suggestions to improve it!.!.!.


Written to my friend,
Who I’ll be with until the end!.
From all the friends I’ll ever know,
You’re the one I’ll care the most!.
And if you go, you should know this,
That you’re the one I’ll always miss!.

There is nothing I wouldn’t do for you,
And I hope you’d do the same for me too!.
So if anyone ever makes you bothered,
Tell me and I’ll make sure you’re covered!.

So do you get the picture of how much I care!?
For you my friend, I’ll always be there!.
So I hope you would do the same for me,
Because you’re my friend and always will be!.

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Okay well please post something because I really need your help!. Thanks!

Oh and the poem that inspired my to write this was the one that's like, "Written with a pen, Sealed with a kiss, If you are my friend, Please answer me this!.!.!." You know it!? Thanks again!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Written to my friend,
Who I’ll be with TILL the end!.
From all the friends I’ll ever MEET,
You’re the one THAT CAN'T BE BEAT
And if you go, you should know this,
That you’re the one I’ll always miss!.

There'S nothing I wouldn’t do for you,
And I hope you FEEL the same WAY too!.
So if anyone ever makes you WEEP,
Tell me and I’ll SMASH THE CREEP!.

So do you SEE how much I care!?
For you my friend, I’M always there!.
I hope you'LL do the same for me,
'Cause you’re my friend and always will be!.
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Its good i guess!.


Last line is the best and good at concluding the poem!. I think the first verse is weakest!. Its pretty good!.

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it's a start i guess!.!.!.i didn't really like it!.!.it's not deepWww@QuestionHome@Com