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Question: Feedback on my poem!?!?!?!?!?
Loose words in my mind
Can’t seem to find
Their way through my writing vessel
My trusty pencil
Thoughts stuck in my head
Can’t make it through the lead
Text destined to be stuck for all time
In a line that doesn’t rhyme
Lost souls that can’t reach the paper
Stay confined in the mind of the writer

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Excellent!.!.!. the art of pouring those deep profound thoughts in ones head onto the keyboard and into print is largely fate!.!.

My best wordings are whilst driving and yet they have yet to reach text !.!.It is not for want or desire, rather an accursed fatedness, some force hindering the advent of eloquence or the formation into words of a celestial beauty of whom many odes are written yet few manage to encompass an eternal love, ineffable and infinite into word !.!.


It's simply but really good!. I agree with the other comment, you get it across well and it creates a strong image for the reader!. It's unique and original too!. :)

Could you tell me what you think of mine!? Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like this, seems like you had a little writers block and decided to write a poem about the problem! This was very creative, great work!Www@QuestionHome@Com

a great WOW :D i have this little admiration for such born writers like YOU! nice one dude :DWww@QuestionHome@Com