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Question: Rate my poem plz (its pretty short)!?
note this is only a section of the Whole poem which is like two pages!.

Regret

dad once told me to live life to the fullest,
live with no regrets,
i wish with all my heart i had listened closer to those important words
b/c i feel now!.!.
that everyday i dont have her in my arms,
everyday i just walk on by,
im livng a mistake!.
walking and carrying sumthing with immeasurable weight,
so much weight on my heart,
all those wrds left unsaid, locked deep with in my heart,
something that'll always be burned in the back of my head,
where ever i go,
where ever i am,
something that'll always make me wonder what could have been,
all that weight and just a single word:
regret Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
it's beautiful! Www@QuestionHome@Com

i think you need a little something stronger in the beginning to draw in the reader, but i really did like the message and your word usage was sufficient to the piece!. it just takes a little practice, you really do have a skill, you jsut need to refine it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A poem is a poem, but this one doesn't look pretty on the page!. Not that that's something important to most, but I think poetry should be visible too!. Perhaps rethink the layout and structure of it!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

pretty good--you should go ahead and spell the words out, put in the capitals, and punctuation
It's got good feeling and clear portrayal of the emotionsWww@QuestionHome@Com