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Question: Not exactly a poem, but what do you think!?
I'm standing
in the pouring rain
Till I'm soaked
Through my body
and into my soul
Where the pain starts
So I can wash it away
If you have to run
Can I come too!?
But if you need to be alone
I'll wait for you
It's what I said
And it's what I meant
Did you hear!?
Cause you never came back
And I'm still standing here
I'm standing
in the pouring rain
Till I'm soaked
Through my body
and into my soul
Where the pain starts
So I can wash it away
Every drop is like a tear
Spilling from my dry heart
But the pain still sears
So still I'll wait hereWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Standing in the pouring rain
You feel the coldest pain
As the skies dream of the sun
You wait for what soul may come
Sharing tears with the blackest skies
You want the world to hear your cries
Somebody will hear your thunder
You tell yourself it's not over
The rain fixes the earth and fills holes with water
But it also drowns the souls that suffer
You're willing to wait for an eternity
Knowing it will only end with a tragedy
A person has come to give you cover
And begins to tell you that it's all over
There's a comfort in your mind
As leave your dark world behind
The stings of pain leave your body
As you go back into the bright reality
You wake from this dream
As you feel the water stream
The pain still lingers there
It's something you choose to bear
This feeling is meant to be shared
For those who aren't so scared
Within this pain so intense
Resides a happiness so dense
But only what two hearts can bring
An infinite beauty, it will spring
Standing in the pouring rain
You feel the coldest pain
As the skies dream of the sun
You wait for that soul comeWww@QuestionHome@Com
It does sound a lot like a poem, but of course it only is if the author wants it to be =]
I really like the idea, seems to be well thought up (or maybe just a good idea that popped into your head once)
The only tiny thing I'd give advice over is the EXACT repetition of the first verse as the second to the last verse!.
Being as it's a relatively medium sized poem (or whatever)!.!.!. You should try for a little more variations!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Its cool!. To be honest, a little too sophisticated for my taste, but that's because I'm the kind of person who finds the whole "man who was eating his shoe" poem classic literature!. Your's is still cool though!. Its poetic and stuff!.
Your thoughts on mine!.!.!.http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
it's sounds like a poem to me but it's only a poem if the author wants it 2 b!. i think it's beautiful! you should get it published!.!. it's so very sad but so very beautiful, i love the body and soul bit!.!.!. oh i just love it all!Www@QuestionHome@Com
its nice!. i like the emotion put in it!.
its awesome to relate to!.
simple yet,
sophisticated,
your talented,
keep writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's hard to get!.
I dont really like it!.
sorry!.
i just thought that if you were like writing it for something for school that you would want an honest opinion!.
So yehh
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I like it, but it makes me somewhat sad!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like it!. =)Www@QuestionHome@Com