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Question: Critique My New Poem: Darling I am sorry!?
Sorry Darling
Sorry darling for the misunderstanding
Sorry for the pain
I never though to hurt you
Your happiness my goal
Things some times happen
Not under my control
Little explanation I can offer
But remorse and regret
So now darling forgive me
Let’s our love remains
Pure and unembellished
For ever and ever again

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Kinda says it all doesn't it!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think the basis of the poem is good, but I think poetry needs to be enigmatic, like a puzzle or a scene, that needs to be read into!. also, revise punctuation!. I can't say it enough!Www@QuestionHome@Com

it works, however you could end with a last line that says again "sorry darling" or "darling, i'm sorry"Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's okay!. Not deep/striking enough!.Www@QuestionHome@Com