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Will You Rate and Suggest A Title for My Poem!?
As sleep trips into night
and darkness consumes my eyes
I fight to stay awake
and sleep and awake intwine
My body is glued to the bed
My arms are stuck to my sides
A chorus whispers in my ear
and my sanity has lost its guide
I feel this paranoia grasp me
as a hand grabs at my neck
and I fight to lift my arms to pull away
or at least to fight back
My heart begins to skip a beat
as I attempt to open my eyes
but this hand smacks me across the face
and now I am blind
A nausea overcomes me
and the hand filters my scream
and the music blares louder
and enables me to dream
And then suddenly it stops
and I tremble in fear
waiting for my paralysis to come back
and the music to reappearWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
My favorite poet always informs the readers that she doesn't name poetry, because it would be trying to describe a color to a blind person!. She always says that the title is up to the reader and if the reader likes it enough they make their own title!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is a very different slant on the process of going to sleep!. It is like a battle rages against an action that is supposed to give a body rest!. Unlike the battle to fall asleep (insomnia) - this writer feels helpless and fights - what is supposed to be - a natural process!. Suggestion: Your meter needs more work - it is really rough in spots!. Here's a link - to help you with your count: ?
Edit: Maybe the title should be "Sleep Paralysis" - as you stated!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i'm sorry that i can't think of a title, but ur poem is really good! out of a 5 i will give it a 5!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Some names Are:
In my deep sleep
Annoy the Paranoia
Midnight Shadows Www@QuestionHome@Com
i like your poem, it is very good! i give it a 9 out of 10!
can you answer this!?