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Question: I wrote this poem, any tittle ideas and honest opinions!?
ok well I'm 15 and wrote this poem
please give me your true opinion, i wont get offend
also if u have any suggestions or ideas for the tittle that would be great

a rush
you cant explain
a sence of happyness
that wont go away
the urge to sing
when every one is around
the need to skip
where ever u might go
when you crave to smile
even if your down
to lose sight
of what is around
to nevr whant to speak again
for the sake that it might go away
the kind of greedyness
taht feels ok
a stomach ache
you look foward to each day
to adore, to fancy
to fall for, to prize
to be nuts about
to love
and it does'nt matter what you say
love just is
that feeling we all share

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I really liked it!. Maybe you could title it 'Love the Feeling'!. I don't know, I'm not much of a poet!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You've got some basically good ideas here, but they're in danger of being lost to poor proofreading!. Your spelling and grammar need work, and it's jarring to use a word like "crave" at one point, while speaking of "going nuts" at another, as well as using u and ok!. Simplify, don't reach for language you don't know how to handle!. Look up words to find their proper spelling and usage!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Correct some of your grammar first!. :)
*happiness - happiness
*u - you
*your - you’re
*nevr – never
*greedyness – greediness
*wahnt – want
*taht – that
*does'nt – doesn’t

Otherwise, it’s not really a poem I’d read!. In other words, it’s not my style!. =P
Perhaps you could use the title “The Feeling” or “Feeling!?” They’re not too original, but they fit!.

Edit it!. Proof read!. Edit again!.

Good luck with your poem!


i really love that! it's great! whoever he is, he must be special!. !. !. !. !. : )Www@QuestionHome@Com

idk what a good title is but its very good!. Www@QuestionHome@Com