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Question: What do you think to my poem!? !?
pls give me some good advice on how to make it better etc etc

I am lonely, like a tree
It's a sad irrationality
My tears fall to the ground
unnoticed but always found

to children, a play thing
found where the brids sing
as time goes by, i grow old
lonely in a field, tall and bold

slowly the gentle wind blows
and suddenly a seed flows
through the air, to the ground
it grows without a sound

gracefully the seasons pass
and so grows the grass
as well as the tree
now bold and tall, just like me

suddenly I now see
the beautiful thing beside me
from the same pattern my life's unglued
and love for me has been renewed

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like what you have to say, but it does lack poetic meter (rhythm)!. For examples of meters, I recommend http://www!.uncg!.edu/~htkirbys/meters!.htm !. I use is a lot, and it has some really good meter info and examples!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is very good!. i have no critique for you because i thought it was very well written!. i liked it very much great job!

have a star =DWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like this quite well - a comparative image of life stages - very good ?Www@QuestionHome@Com

its amazing!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

what is it supposed to mean/represent!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

It is so beautiful!. like nothing i've read b4!. amazing work that you doWww@QuestionHome@Com