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Question: "Parsimbralad" is a mutt; a mix of Partenza, Dorsimbra and Ballad!. Do you like it!?
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A wee and weary child, not mine,
not mine, a shadow spectre,
o’ spectre of a broken time,
en’ time from glass reflectors,

Mirror’s what we call them,
not image-man reflectors,
make up you mind on space and time,
project your self-protectors,

And wait for me, beyond the trees,
the trees, you’ll hear me in laughter,
laughter and me believing in things,
in things that giggle and whisper…

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I enjoy creativity in poetry!. Your style makes this 'mix' a glowing form!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I do like it!. I really like how you handled the wrapped refrain in the first stanza!.!.!."o' specter!.!.!.en' time!.!.!." Jill did that in her partenza and I thought it was ingenious!. I also enjoyed the rhyme and rhythm of the second stanza!. And, the last stanza is just plain sweet!. "in things that giggle and whisper" This put a smile on my face!. You are on a role today :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Poetry evolves! Using the mirror as reflector to see one's youth is a very creative metaphor!. The contrast of the whispering and giggling child with the "wee and weary child" tells the story of a lifetime in a few words!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

WoW! When you create, you create! This reminds me of a toddler racing around in a hall of mirrors!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

And almost a boogie woogie hit!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This a form I can relate to! We really are all mirrors, aren't we!?
This is a real keeper!.Www@QuestionHome@Com