Would you please read and critique my Villanelle in Quatra?

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SOME AARON COPLAND, PLEASE

Oh what a great feast it will be,
I serve the traditional way,
Exactly at quarter to three,

Pate’ with a spread of green peas,
Some hot soup, or maybe sorbet,
Oh what a great feast it will be,

Then I’ll make fish, not too fishy,
A leek and red onion entrée,
Exactly at quarter to three,

Next comes beef from Kansas City,
Brisket smoking since yesterday,
Oh what a great feast it will be,

The baker bringing something sweet,
Cut flowers for center bouquet,
Exactly at a quarter to three,

Ready to blanch, fry, broil and heat,
Stir, add, blend, melt, mix and puree,
Oh what a great feast it will be,
Exactly at a quarter to three,

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The imagery in this write is excellent!.
Chef TD,
Qui, Qui,
I love fish not to fishy,
Yummy!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

This classical form, made contemporary by its subject matter, illustrates how a poet can renew and revitalize ancient poetic forms!. It flows easily and makes invisible the work behind the final product!. This is what good poetry should do!. As I have said many times before, it is a shame that the sonnet is probably the only master form taught in schools any more!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

If I were a fly I would say :
"Get on with it!” (s)he shouts, “We’re Hungry!”
(to quote a famous local identity)

A literal feast for the eyes (there's that damn I spy fly again) very musical as well!.

PS You want flies with that!?
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This is a really lovely poem and i liked it a lot'but it sure has my mouth watering now!.lol!. Any meat or barbecue from Kansas city is the best ever!.i know !.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I am ready with appetite in tack at exactly at a quarter of three!
Very nice you never disappoint!
You have the music what about the wine, oh yes a nice Chardonnay will do!
Cheers

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Technically, fine, but fails to do it for me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow, TD, this is a cool Villanelle with a fun and creative theme!.Www@QuestionHome@Com