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Question: Opinions/critique on my poem!?
I wrote this poem for a contest!. Here's the link to see the poem (with it's corresponding picture) or you can just read it:

http://hs!.facebook!.com/photo!.php!?pid=127!.!.!.
(If you have a Facebook, I would really appreciate a vote!)

I see you: strong, beautiful, tanned - mine!.
The words fly out before I know what I'm saying!.
"I love you!."
Blushing, flustered, sheepish, flushed red!.
I watch you struggle for words,
Stalling and stumbling and sputtering!.
For one-thousandth of a second,
The room is far too quiet!.
I understand what you're trying to say, and I want to run!.
I want to run far, far away!.
To a place where I can never be hurt this way!.
"I like you a lot," you say quietly!.
My heart sinks into a swamp of unimaginable depth!.
"Right," I respond, trying hard not to cry!.
"That's what I meant to say!."
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It's not a poem, really!. It's more of a monologue of an awkward moment!. Www@QuestionHome@Com