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Question: New poem!.!. please rate if youv'e got the time!?
also i have no name yet!.!. so i'm taking suggestions!. this is actually the first draft too so forgive any roughness or rhythm flaws!.


fleeing in the dark!.
the unsavory grasp of cold hands,
leaving their mark!.
the tranquility of your plans!.

tempt the fire!.
the frigid hold of pleasure,
extinguish desire!.
for sin has not a cure!.

reach into your mind,
fall to the depths of reconciliation!.
blindness consumes our time!.
pull the trigger and fire your gun!.

weak are the masses,
who swim relentlessly,
down a stream of poison gases!.
they kill themselves like Presley!.

inhale your demise,
the horizan is dark with doom!.
angels fall from the skies!.
they've already sealed their tomb!.

chivalry is dead,
like rome of old!.
put a bullet in your head!.
the grasp is forever cold!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That poem has soo much passion to it! i can tell you are put a lot of thought into your poems, and sadly i have no talent with titles!. but if i come up with one, i will write it down if i'm out and about!. and when you finalize it, can you email it to me!? i love to read other peoples' work!.
IDEAS:
Grasp of the Dead!. (!?) sry!.
Forever ColdWww@QuestionHome@Com

wow!.!.!. you really have talent!.!.!. sorry that i have no suggestions for your poem title but you have amazed me!Www@QuestionHome@Com