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Question: Don't I ,,poem for you ,plz read and be gentle !?
Don’t I hold you!?
Don’t you feel my arms around you
Every time I carry you to bed
And smooth your forehead with my palm
Don’t I hold you!?
And wipe your tears
Take away your biggest sadness
And tiny fears
Don’t I hold you!?
When you stumble
When your legs shake
And seek for the ground
Don’t I hold you
When you get sick
And your fever get so high
I give you water to drink
And sooth you to sleep
Or Sprinkle your sky
Don’t I hold you!?
When you runaway from me
And tell me everything is over
And I just wish you the best in life,,
Then if I do all this and more
Why
Is it so hard for everyone to understand that my heart
Beat at your rhythm
Why
do everyone wants me to get over you
Its my fate, that I give you all this and just leave
The world to die
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Thats really beautiful!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.though we feel very sad over the death of a loved one, life goes on and personally I believe that they are with us but in paradise!. I have lost someone very dear to me - I nursed him 6 and a half years before he died in my arms!. I often feel he is around me!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Perhaps listen to the songs China Roses by Enya http://www!.youtube!.com/watch!?v=N8XXcDUrd!.!.!.
and To Where you Are by G4 http://www!.youtube!.com/watch!?v=FysnCm00B!.!.!.
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Well i'm not sure who that was written for but its beautiful!. You are very expressive!.
Thanks - i enjoyed reading it :-)Www@QuestionHome@Com
I agree with Happy Hiram!. Although I will say that you should definitely keep working on it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Since you don't want criticism, I will say nothing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i enjoyed your poem you have a artistic heart good luckWww@QuestionHome@Com
i think this is a sad poem but i think u are very talented :]Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think that it's good!. I just got a little lost at the end!. It might be the poem or it might be that I'm just slow!. lol!. It sounds like it's for your growing child!. Like you've been holding them all their life and it's not being appreciated!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It is nice!.
You must to try some more, if you do want rhyme be careful to have them all over your poem, till to the end!.
Whatever hard it may be, a mother knows the answers for her children, sometimes during the time !.!.!.
Probably one day your child will be proud of mom's poems!.
And would be extremely proud if you would fight all the way long even not for a better world for your son, but first of all for a loving soul and a great courage into your son!.
If these may be of any help!? I do not know, just you may try:
http://info!.noelbatten!.com/
http://www!.powerofattitudemovie!.com/
Good start in poetry !Www@QuestionHome@Com