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I’ve waited so long
For my prince to come
A boy to care for
Someone to hug, kiss, and love
A devotion strong enough
For ours souls to entwine
And when we depart
We will look down
As we reminisce
About that magical day
When we first met
I don't know if I should add this part:
I was lost in your eyes of blue
You couldn’t help but smile
After our lips first made contact
And our bodies locked
In a sweet embrace
We knew it was love
And like two turtle doves
We will never drift apart
Any comments welcome :-)
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that is really good wayyy better than i could write!.!.lol!.!.!.and deffenitly add the last part!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's good enough!. But the poetic images you're conjuring have been used so much over time that they feel empty!. Love is a strong emotion and somehow this poem just hasn't "matured!." I think an effective poem succeeds in creating the intended emotion in the reader and this poem speaks about love but I just don't feel it, sorry!. That's just my opinion!.
Check this out:
http://rlexperiment!.blogspot!.com/2008/08!.!.!.
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i dont think u should add that, but u should add it as "part 2"Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like it!. You do not need the second part!.Www@QuestionHome@Com