Like all the others, a poem I wrote..?

Question: Like all the others, a poem I wrote!.!.!?

Starlight, the night's bed light
Whom holds a thousand lover's dream
Your cousins dumbfound us
Streaking their manes through the foreign sky
Flying free
Till they pass us by
Gravity snatches the non-citizens
and molds them to our home
Teaching us to remember this:
Hold tight to the constants
wish on these,
They will stay in the sky
Through your life's breeze

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This is very cute
I like how you describe the stars as
nights bed light!. That holds a thousand love dreams!.
I see romance in this part!.
it also serves as a lesson because it teaches you
to remember!.

Stars Poem:
I look up at the sky at night
as they are shimmering!.
the stars also dance
Stars can form a constellation
and often do!.
Its a pity they don't stay out during the day
they go to the other side of the world
But it has to be night for the stars

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That's pretty good!. I think you need to add more to it, but I think it might be a wonderful poem!
But I think you need to use more simple words, not for like dumb people, but because it sounds kinda too business like, if you know what I mean!?

But great job though!
I'll give you a 7 & a half, out of 10!.
Keep writing!
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I think it's good enough!. You probably don't need to change anything!. Keep it up :-)Www@QuestionHome@Com