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Question: What's your opinion on this poem/song I wrote!?
I look out of my window,
& watch the cars passing by
It reminds me of the memories,
& leaves me wondering why

I'm sorry I took you for granted,
& now I've learned my lesson
You meant so much to me,
but now you've made it to heaven

If I were given a second chance
I'd take back all the times I looked away
I'd listen to what you had to say
& I'd hold you in my arms & pray
ohhhh, i wish i can see you for a moment
if only for an instant
mhmm!.!.

I'm so glad your in heaven now
Because you deserve to be there
I just wish I would have spent time with you
& told you that everything I felt was true

I hope you're looking down on me
trying to help me see clearly
Because I can't stand this feeling
So I'll just keep on wishing
that you are here by my side
if only for a while!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It's pretty good but some things need to be more fluent, i would rate you with a thumbs up but i'm not on level two so i want to get the best answers award thingy [ No pressuree ;-) ]!. Anyway i think where it says but now you've made it to heaven, you should write; and though my chance is gone i'd reach for you in heaven and tell of my love for you and how ,oh how it's true or something not so jolted!. Surely you jest, of caurse it's good!. You should check out my questions!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

It awful!. !. !.awfully touching!. !.
Im not sure if I'm right but i felt like this person is feeling regretful or guilty some sorts!. !. nice piece of work!. !. really!Www@QuestionHome@Com

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