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Question: What do you think to my poem!?
I have seen the morning burning golden on the mountains in the skies!.
Achin' with the feelin' of the freedom of an eagle when she flies!.
Turnin' on the world the way she smiled upon my soul as I lay dying!.
Healin' as the colours in the sunshine and the shadows of her eyes!.

Wakin' in the mornin' to the feelin' of her fingers on my skin!.
Wipin' out the traces of the people and the places that I've been!.
Teachin' me that yesterday was something that I never thought of trying!.
Talkin' of tomorrow and the money, love and time we had to spend!.

And lovin' her was easier than anything I'll ever do again!.


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
this is a great poem!!!!!! Awesome!!!!!!! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it, the only problem that you have is that you lines have too many words/syllables!. shorten them down or make them in to 2 sentences and have and AB rhyming pattern!. answer mine: http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

LOVE IT!!! AMAZING!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

It sounds good (I like it)Www@QuestionHome@Com