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Question: What do you think!.!.!.!? [Please, I really need your opinion]!?
My hands will wait for yours!.
For you I only adore!.
My lips will whisper those words!.
Through all those sleepless nights!.
Don’t you realize!? It’s all you!.
The only one I can’t go a day without!.
My mind cant ever let go!. Will it ever!?
You’re holding the piece!. The only one I really need!.
For this heart to beat again!.
When will you return the meaning of this existence!?
I’ve cried out and reached out!.
But your too far gone!.
I remained right here where you laid!.
My hands in yours!. Those arms holding me so tight!.
As we exchange our smile!.
Where are you now!?
You’d never know the reasons why!
You left me with these memories and emotions!.
All these devotions for you!.
Where are you now!?
Will you ever know the reasons why its true!?
What can I do now for you to hear these words!?
These pictures will never talk back!.
I continue to spill my heart out to this!.
Should it matter!?
In my head!. In my mind!. In my thoughts!.In my heart!. In my smile!. In my life!. Your always there!.
But you’d never know the reasons why!.
Is this what you want!? Your love as my punishment!?
Having you, but never getting to hold you!.
Loving you, but never getting to show you!.

I never got the chance to tell you
I love you!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
loooooooooooooove it!. I really do!. It has so much emotion and it comes from the soul the heart and a poets voice!. It was beautiful!. I think I might steal it!.!.lol J/k but I really loved itWww@QuestionHome@Com

Very poignant indeed- It prompts so many questions in the reader's mind!. So personal too!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice work!.!.!.!.!.it's emotive and expresses emotions bout love in more then one way!!

Keep writingWww@QuestionHome@Com

Omg that was really cool!. I really loved the end!. That part gave me shivers!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It is very romantic!. I can really feel what you are saying!. It is deep!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is very good!. You really kept me reading!.
Great ending!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You are so great! Please pick meWww@QuestionHome@Com

i like it, a lot!Www@QuestionHome@Com

My hands will wait for yours!. - boring
For you I only adore!. - bad English, cheap rhyme
My lips will whisper those words!. -cliche, 100 other bad poems
Through all those sleepless nights!. -cliche why not invent something!?
Don’t you realize!? It’s all you!. - prose
The only one I can’t go a day without!. -cliche copied instead of creating something of your own!.
My mind cant ever let go!. Will it ever!? - mangled language & prose-y
You’re holding the piece!. The only one I really need!. -piece!?
For this heart to beat again!. -cliche making the above a mixed metaphor!.
When will you return the meaning of this existence!? -boring, trite
I’ve cried out and reached out!. -redundant
But your too far gone!. -cliche
I remained right here where you laid!. -hilarious, if it were really the end!.
My hands in yours!. Those arms holding me so tight!. -cliche
As we exchange our smile!. -for laughs
Where are you now!? -where is the poetry!?
You’d never know the reasons why! -knew, and this would be cliche
You left me with these memories and emotions!. -what m & e's maybe your should write about that instead of stringing cliches!.
All these devotions for you!. -Sure aren't doing the reader anything!.
Where are you now!? - repetition of a bad line only compounds the problem!.
Will you ever know the reasons why its true!? - prose
What can I do now for you to hear these words!? - prose
These pictures will never talk back!. -What pictures!?
I continue to spill my heart out to this!. -unfortunately
Should it matter!? -It should but apparently doesn't
In my head!. In my mind!. In my thoughts!.In my heart!. In my smile!. In my life!. Your always there!. -cliche, run-on and prose-y
But you’d never know the reasons why!. -really heavily cliche
Is this what you want!? Your love as my punishment!? -In what way!?
Having you, but never getting to hold you!. -Is this what this is about, until now, I had no idea!.
Loving you, but never getting to show you!. -If this is what you wanted to write about, start with this, this is apparently the subject of this poem, though lost in a sea of cliche, pointless questions and endless sea of "you, I, what, reasons, meaning, mind, heart, etc!.!.!." that adds nothing to "I miss telling you I love you!." which is what you want to say!.

I never got the chance to tell you - here is the message
I love you!. - 28 or 29 lines to get to what you ACTUALLY want to say!. Say what you want up front and be done with it!. If you can't write poetically, write breifly; brevity is closer to poetry than artifice!.
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