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Question: I wrote a poem, but I think it's weird!. Opinions please!?
Don't be too harsh!. I barely write and today I just felt like doing something creative!. I'm 15 by the way!.!. not that it matters!.
Just wanted opinions and suggestions!. Thanks!. =]
It’s past 3 o’clock and I’m sitting in the rain
I thought I knew you well but I will surely take this blame
All these things I imagined
And all the images of you
These wonderful feelings I thought were real
But they will never come true
You tried to get to know me
But who I am is not what you think!.
I pushed you away like I always do
My life will never change
I thought we had a chance
I believed you were my missing piece
The first person in so long
And now we won’t be seen
I blame myself for all of this
And still want to be with you
My feelings constantly change
I won’t ever know the truth
We had a chance and we still do
I’d like to know what you feel
Because my feelings will never hide
These small little feelings that have been dreadful inside!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
No, there is nothing weird here at all, Just the emotions you feel about a possible relationship that you were scared to accept!.
The fact that you wrote it down and achieved a creditable poem is encouraging, keep writing!.
On the other front, if you really want to know this other person better, then go and ask them out! The worst that can happen is they say no, the best is a lifelong relationship!. Hmmmm, tough call!.
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There is something here in what you write - keep going and putting thoughts and feelings into the words!.
It is a great beginning effort, more than many ever do, who think about it and never try it out!.
Thanks for putting it out here! =)Www@QuestionHome@Com
its very heart felt but i think it would be better if it followed a certain beat or rhythm!. also, I'm pretty sure ive heard poems like this a billion times!. change it a little to make it more interesting!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Very song-ish!. Its beautiful but is common!. :( You should spice it up a little bit more!. Make it unique!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Ye i thought it was good
I struggle to write poetry
i can write stories and all sorts, and i'm not stupid!.
I just CAN'T write songs or poetry!.
At all!.
So you did great lol!.
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Your very talented, WOW, I am in my 30's and best i can do is roses are red!.Www@QuestionHome@Com