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Question: My poem again!. I have added some bits to it!.!.!. :) !?
Enduring the pain
That has been left behind
The loneliness has engulfed me
Swallowing me in the darkness
Suffocating me in the thick air
The past couple of months have been hell
Needing to talk to you almost every day
The word “lost” is engraved in my heart
Establishing all the needs
Pull the trigger on the gun
That lonely shadow still stalks me
I’m begging someone to escort me to safety
Striving for the highest level I can be
Endeavoring to reach past the point
Eliminating everything around me
Embarking on a mysterious journey
Who made these impossible dreams!?
Wondering how to ensure we meet again
But astonished at how you easily inspired me
I’ve suppressed my feelings and tried to smile
Can’t tolerate these emotions
The room absolutely serene
Since you came into my life,
The light has been shining brighter than usual
Blinding me at a fast rate
Through my glassy sharp eyes, I see:
The red horizon with stars twinkling up high
Fragments of hope falling down with the rain
An impulse to do something crazy
To satisfy my own desires with infinite hope
I see a shooting star across the sky,
As I look out my window one night
Its glittery figure let out sparks
Making the night even more mysterious
You invigorated me fully
And for that… I thank you
…for the Angels Golden Touch


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
don't listen to hbg what his name was!. i think your poem was exceptional pen pointed alot of things someone felt!. why it made them feel that!. very good!. just keep writing it will make you better trust me i try to write one poem a week, not about anyting but things that happened 2 me and other things!. just keep up the good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it is not very much comfortable to read!.This poem will be great if rearrange properlyWww@QuestionHome@Com