Poem!!!!!? HELP!!!!!!!?

Question: Poem!!!!!!? HELP!!!!!!!!?

okay i want to know what you guys think of the poem, and if you can relate to it!

Broken pieces

every second without,
you feels like an hour

every thought about you,
hurts every minute!.

when you're not here,
its impossible to breathe!.

looking at you,
shatters my heart,
like broken glass!.

i look at you to fix the pieces!.
But you leave me behind!.

alone and
shattered!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

u shouldn't use shatters and shattered the way you did!.
its pretty all over the place!.!.which, is ok, based on thats kinda what the poem is about!.!.!.!.your feeling scatered etc!.

to fix the shattered issue, last like could just be

alone and tattered
or alone and scattered!.
orrr alone and wounded!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

!.!.scatters like broken glass!.!. feels better to me but it is your poem and as such you need to make changes for your own sense of feel and sound!.

Nice poem!.!. I like itWww@QuestionHome@Com

It's so nice! Don't change a thing!. I think many people can relate to this poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

great!. i liked it a lot!. keep up the good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com