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Question: Will you read this poem please!?
it doesnt rhyme but,

The elevator doors separate
My body pushes me into it
I look at you
My favorite friend
The doors open again
Time to walk to the security zone
I'm Okay
We sit a while
Watch the line grow longer
I try to ingnore my thoughts
You look at me this time
With a different look in your eyes
Time for me to go
Come out of you
I'm still not excepting it
You hug me the last time
Seems like forever
The you walk away
I feel so light
I might just fall
Then you pass the gate
Look at me once more
My eyes already starting rain
the tears
I can't forget any of this
Please think of me while you're gone

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
what i love the most is that it doesn't rhyme!.!. most rhyming poems are just words but this really does mean something!.!. wright alot of more poems and in the future you could put them in your own book!.!. and online they have poetry contest where sometimes the company who holds them makes a book of all of the winners!.!. like the winning poems get put into itWww@QuestionHome@Com

your poem is really a great the rhythm is something like a burning up of Jonas brother and the music is soft rock it feels like a best song!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

awwww!.!.!.!.is this something that happened!?!? it's kinda sad , but it is very good!.
Collect your poems and then publish them!! talent you have my dear, talent!.
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In my opinion it is sentences
boring sentences
unoriginal vocabulary
no rhythm
divided randomly
my opinion!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That's fantastic! You should seriously think about publishing this poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com

what a great poem =D

It may not rhyme as much, but its great description like a movie playing in my head =D

Great job!Www@QuestionHome@Com

That is such a Fantastic poem! <3 i love it, it has Sooo much meaning!Www@QuestionHome@Com

holy crap!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! u wrote this!?!?!?!?!? that is soooooooo good!. I LOVE IT! BRAVO>BRAVO!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its pretty good!.!.I liked it!Www@QuestionHome@Com