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Question: Your opinion and suggestions for the name of my poem!?
What do you think of this poem I wrote!? I think it might be a little off, so any suggestions will be appreciated!.

Sick, gaudy and strewn
Across the lawn like too many filthy paper bags!.
One by one, she hurries to dispose of them!.
They get caught in the wind and swirl away!.
Panic grows and a passionate hatred springs forth from within!.
Dizzy and nauseous, she breaks down
While they observe in silence and confusion!.
They see not the vile, all consuming pestilence
They see not the last fading remnants of her sanity!.
They only see her,
A self-made mess,
Sprawled silently across the neat green grass!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i don't really get what you're trying to say here could you explain!? the rhythm is excellent!. i could read this all day!. the line that really jumps out at me is 'a self-made mess' so you could call it that if you want!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

How about Esteem!? No that's no good!.
Yard Work is Hard Work!? No!.
Trash Bags Unseen,
Crazy Lady Next Door
I got it--Manicured Lawn!. I give up!.
I second "Control"Www@QuestionHome@Com

Inner LitterWww@QuestionHome@Com

Control is the poems nameWww@QuestionHome@Com