Can Semper attempt a Partenza Represa? Please have Mercy?

Question: Can Semper attempt a Partenza Represa!? Please have Mercy!?

Mars Is In The Red
By Semper Fi Reborn

I seek the wisdom of poets of days gone
Days gone into the winds of time
Of time and great prose lasted ions
Ions never give voice to the sublime

Sublime is not who the martians are
Martians are teachers of verse intellect
Intellect is the reason they travelled this far
This far out of new found respect

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

The core message is great and the lines flow!.

However, Spyfyr, the creator of this form, wants 8 beats to a line!.
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Starting at the top!.!.!.I like the title
(very funny, bit like USA at the moment)

What are 'ions' and why don't they give voice to the sublime!?

And I don't believe the Martians respect us - they are hovering around (that's 'hovering' not 'hoovering') our planet waiting for us to really cock the planet up, and then 'woosh' they'll be landing on the White House lawn!.
I'm with Elaine on this!.!.!.!.discipline is slipping around here!.!.!.!.rules are made to be obeyed, you poets are all the same, give you an inch and you take a mile!.
Oh, go on, she said begrudgingly, just this once - we'll let you off!.!.!.!.crikey A!Y I only said 'c*ockWww@QuestionHome@Com

Well, U have the touch,
The touch of magical flow
Flow U render so much
So much in meaning, U know
U know what to put in such
In such few words 'd do

What I like more about this attempt is your appreciation to all those forgotten soldiers!. U keep on amazing me with all these topics, treating them w/ high morality, and that is rare nowadays!. Thanx !
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Where do I meet these Martian teachers!? I know not of them!. I certainly could use being enlightened!. How do they differ from those of us here on Terra Firma!? Would I recognize them if I saw them; or is this only a concept of prose and poetry!? Nonetheless (sic) I am impressed by the way you said what you said!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is the worst epidemic I've seen here!. This Partenza Ripresa virus seems to be able to mutate into many wonderful forms, such as this one!.
You Martians ARE the teachers of verse intellect!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very good Semper - now try the 8 beat (cosign EP) - once you have the rhythm, then you'll feel the force!. Forza Represa!!

Do forgive me all, but I am glad the Hurricane Trigee passed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Thank you!.!.!.we have traveled far, and the journey with you has been wonderful!. May we continue!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is very cool, the form in free verse!. I just love how these are turning out!. The 2009 book will feature many of them!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I am never disappointed by your poetry Semper!. I'm simply in awe!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice flow to this Semper!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Great poem! (Ions are charged particles for those who do not understand)Www@QuestionHome@Com