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Question: Is this poem i wrote for my gf goood!?
Ive stolen countless breaths
from this world i am living in
this journey I'm on
i did not consent too
and i have not embraced
or even bothered to taste
the sweet aroma of meaning
i stumbled upon you accidentally
i was not in search of you
i was in search of me
but everything changed
when i looked into your eyes
elusive and transparent
i could see the depths of your heart
and for a split second
i forgot to breath
and at the same time as yours
my heart skipped a beat
your beauty was overwhelming
instantaneous love out of a dream
an angel had lifted me off of my feet
words don't do justice to the beauty i saw
her beauty and grace left my heart in awe
her lips were soft and her voice was sweet
her fingers trembled when they first touched me
our eyes met and i heard her speak
i listened to her and my heart began to wept
god gave me what i was praying for
in the chamber of life you unlocked the door
today was the day i was waiting for
my search for meaning in life was no more
Trevor
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
oh my!
thatss completely amazing(:
no joke, if i were her i would be the happiest girl ever!.
i would love if someone wrote me thattt!.
she would love it(:
good luck!
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wow, any girl who got a poem like that from her bf would be one of the luckiest girls in the world! That was very sweet and she'll love it!. People always say things are too corny, but really deep down they like the gushy attention!. One thing though, not to correct you or anything, but 5 lines from the bottom maybe you want to put weep instead of wept!. ; )Www@QuestionHome@Com
wow this is really really good man! this is the sweetest thing a guy could do for a girl, and with out being cheesy, because i could tell these were your true emotions and it showed, she will love this poem no doubt,
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lol words cant win sum1's heart even playboys say some good poems and win girls hearts!.!.!.those girls are crazy!.!.!. becoz they think they are romantic but whatever they say in their poem they'll never actually do that or had heppaned to them like
- i can die for you but when their GF say die!.!.!.they won't!.!.!.
poems are meaningless stop wasting ur time boy!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
You would seriously regret NOT giving that to her!. Trust me :]
What a wonderful job!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
well i think its kinda boring !.
buh what matter is what ur gf think of it !.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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