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Here I sit heavily alone
Heart newly made of wood and stone

Each fiber lined cancerous path
Now home to mites, courtesy of wrath

Teardrops to torrents my flesh erode
Deposits minerals to love's lode

Fiery love created to devour
An atom raised to the sixth power

My essence distilled as she raged
Now I await the axeman's gauge
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Here I sit heavily alone
Heart newly made of wood and stone
-- Grief, loneliness

Each fiber lined cancerous path
Now home to mites, courtesy of wrath
-- A corpse!

Teardrops to torrents my flesh erode
Deposits minerals to love's lode
-- A rotting corpse, cool!

Fiery love created to devour
An atom raised to the sixth power
-- Killed by love!

My essence distilled as she raged
Now I await the axeman's gauge
--Wait, what!? She's angry, I am about to be executed!? What the hell just happened to this cool poem!?

I can't fathom this final left turn!. Maybe I'm stupid!. Thanks for the experience of reading your poem!.

First 4 stanzas: A+!. Last stanza: !?!?!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Great lexicon of words!. "Love's lode" -- I liked that!. Yeah, the ol' mother lode at that, lol!. Very good, an 8 on a scale of 10!. I am usually loath to strew compliments on much of the poetry posted here, so I hope that counts for something when I say I liked it!. If I sort of liked a poem, I won't even bother to answer but I will star it!. You get both!. -lolWww@QuestionHome@Com

How thrilled I am to read this, dear friend!.!.!.and I get the last line, I think!.!.you watched the cancer eat her up (raged!.!.in pain, succumbing to the disease) and as the caregiver were so drained, there's no life remaining in you (essence distilled), and you are left to wait!.

I don't think you took a left turn at all!

Please offer more, you know what I've always said about your mind and creativity!.

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it seems like your forcing it, dont rape your poem, let the meaning flow free through!. like this you cant get the meaning its like your jumping around a lot though i get the overall meaning!. screw the rhyme and screw the whole two line thing if its going to force it!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Excellent use of rhyming couplets!. The poem also contains many metaphors!. You have succeeded in using poetic devices in this poem and have conveyed your message without hitting the reader over the head with angst!.

I like this poem very much!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I really wasn't expecting this!.!.!. I thought I was gonna read some goofy lines about some zoological theme!. This is beautiful!. Have you copyrighted it!? I think I am gonna send it to ''Fancy Cat Magazine'' under my name!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

It rhymes and the flow of the words is all right!.!.!.but what exactly are you trying to say through the poem!? The words are very confusing!. Is it a riddle!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm stunned that someone with an imaginary zoo can compose such an exquisite work of art!.

er, well, no I'm not!.
I recognize your intelligence, and it's proven in this masterful tidbit!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it is really creative and the imagery is great!.
I think it's really great and I enjoyed reading it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

AWESOME!. WELL DONE!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very Nice
I like it!.
I think that you have done very well on this piece, Continue what you are doing and I look forward to future pieces!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds like a lot of pain there brotha!. Good job on the poem and relayimg the feeling!. 10!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

very good! 10 !.!.!.!.
too sad though, rather have you so happy you turn your great writing and feelings into love or happy poems of life, life is too sad already!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it, I like it a lot!. Leaves me sad and needing a hug!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I Love it, you are Awesome!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It brings back vivid memories of my 6th grade play: I played a mean tree once!

Good job!Www@QuestionHome@Com