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Question: Any comments, please!?
at some point
we all have been there!.!.!.
you know the place!.
the place where love becomes anger,
and lust becomes disgust!.
trying to rise above this soul-less plain
is harder each time we visit!.
allowing our soul to trust,
and to soar,
is an all consuming task!.
yet, we try,
again and again,
to reach that other place!.
the place where love and lust,
and hope and trust,
join to fill our soul!.


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
If we keep trying, it happens!. I promise you that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

(soul-less plane (!?))

I like it!.!.!.!.the occasional rhyme satisfies my rhyming soul, and the carefully selected lines ensure that every ounce of meaning is extracted from each phrase!.

This is pared down to the bone - every word is needed, and there are no superfluous hangers on!. The enjambment too works extremely well here, carrying you onward to the last line!.
Well written in a quiet, undramatic way!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This was very well penned!. I hope you continue writing more!. Poems like this shows how you feel on the inside most of the time!. Being able to write poems like this are normally beautiful and makes you feel what the author was feeling when they write it!. Very well done!. Kudos,
KelsWww@QuestionHome@Com

Thoughtful, beautiful message! I would work on changing some words aroung though (ex: "trying" is so vapid)!.

I like it overall :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I agree with Elaine!. Keep trying because it will happen!. Great poem!.!.!.it speaks for many!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

You mean like how I can stub my toe on the same piece of furniture that's been there for years!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

a shimmering hope beacons
like a mirage!.!.!. waters over lands
it was never there
but still!.!.!. we keep on walking!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

not badWww@QuestionHome@Com