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Position:Home>Poetry> NEW POEM! Please read and tell me what you think! Won't you?Question: NEW POEM! Please read and tell me what you think! Won't you!? Move into the light
Walk along the high beam, perhaps if you focus, you will reach the moon!. Dance, dance along its surface, crawl into the craters, speak into the sky!. Feel the weightlessness take you over, float, feel happier than you ever have!. Swim through the air, Leave your mark forever, for once be apart of something!. All you have to do is move into the light!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: it's really good! but, in the 5th line i would say add another "dance" or take one away, because it kind of sounds awkward to meWww@QuestionHome@Com Its good!. You should check out allpoetry!.com you can post your poems to be read and enter them in contest!.While reading other peoples poetry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com That is a beautiful poem you have major talent!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I feel like I've taken to the Celestial Olympics!.!.!. where medals are from the rocks of Jupiter!. I enjoyed reading!.Www@QuestionHome@Com *sniffles* YOU'RE AWESOME!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com I guess you should lay off the mushroomsWww@QuestionHome@Com Good!Www@QuestionHome@Com Dude I luv it! Keep writing ?Www@QuestionHome@Com |