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Question: Do you like my poem!? !?
Do you want the world!?
I would buy you a dozen roses,
Dance across all the desert,
Swim the ocean,
write a song
paint a picture for you!.!.!.
if it only meant one kiss!.
I am begging for your taste!.
I would save the world,
make the sun shine,
catch a falling star and
put in your pocket,
cut you a lock of my hair,
put the universe in a jar,
for you if it only meant!.!.!.
one kiss!.
Please I only want to taste you once,
or twice I fear,
my sweet!.
But who knows maybe you'll want me too,
don't let me go,
hold on tight!.
I only want one kiss!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
that is super good!. its soo cute and full of emotion!.
the only advice i could give would be to change the "i am begging for your taste" and "please i only want to taste you once"
that sounds incredibly weird & awkward!.
other than that,
amazing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think your poem is fabulous!. It is full of emotion and angst!. I can almost feel your aching need for that one kiss!. Try not to take lines obviosly from other sources "catch a falling star!.!.!.!.!." as it lessens the impact of what is a very good poem!. Keep writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
The tasting part is just weird!.!.!.!.!.everything else is cool!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
you should make it into a song!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
It;s okWww@QuestionHome@Com
you cerainly have a fridnge full of lust for this person!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
aww that is so cute!!!! I LOVE IT! good job and keep writingWww@QuestionHome@Com
i think u should save the "only one kiss" till the end!.!.!. leaves more suspnse!. but dont worry its great! SO SWEET ; >Www@QuestionHome@Com