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Question: Is my poetry good :X please read them!?
I wrote these out of what i was feeling!. and!.!.please don't be harsh!. i just anted to know if they seem mature!? or if they seem childish or good!.!.!.or!.!.yeah!. thanks :)

I've been told
I'v been told that im alot to handle and uncool
i'v been told im useless
lazy and a fool
a fool for thinking
i could make it big when no one's made it yet!.
since now the world is poverty,
added with taxes and stuck in debt!.
i'v been told iv gone to jupiter and back
no ones believed me yet,
they sit there and they laugh!.
i'v been told i'm strange!.!.and majorly pathetic
i'v been told im very high strung,
and lack to be majestic!.
throughout my life so far, i plan on getting outside this hell
whether that means on earth or not, i will soon be living well!.
XX

I know it must be pointless
I know it must be pointless
to try and get you to understand
i can see you won't give up, so just come, and take my hand!.
i see things differently,
that i can't deny
you see a world of possabilities
i see a world of lies!.
You might think that you can change me
but between you and i
in the future,
"nothing" is what i see!.
come a little closer
and to you i'm going to tell
how much this society meant to me
and how now its such a crazy hell!.
now i know it was pointless
to try and get you to understand
i can see, now, you've given up,
but you still came, and took my hand!.
XX
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Very mature!. I absolutely love them especially the second one!. great job (:Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think you are a good poet!.
Keep up the good work!
[I am a notoriously harsh critic and I would not pull any punches if I thought any less of your work,]

Thanks for the experience of reading your poems!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

*well they are definetly mature, and i like reading poetry with real emotion behind it!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!. I think it is really good!. And Yes it is mature!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The second on is really goodWww@QuestionHome@Com