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Question: How is this Partenza Represa!? Did I do it right!?
Promised Days……A Partenza Represa
By C!.S!. Scotkin


Days you promised are coming soon,
are coming soon, and you will stay,
and you will stay with me my dear,
with me, my dear, for seven days!.

For seven days we’ll wear no watch,
we’ll wear no watch to interfere,
to interfere with love so dear,
with love so dear I feel you near!.

I feel you near, though you are not
though you are not yet with me love,
yet with me, love, an empty place
an empty place longs for embrace!.
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Yes, you did it right and it is excellent!. You've created a very loving and elegant poem with a distinct sense of longing!. Skillfully wrought and beautiful!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think Spytfyr will agree with me when I say I think this is a picture perfect Partenza Represa!. All lines are eight syllables, they rhyme scheme is intricate and haphazard, kind of like love, so it suits the form of the poem!. This is beautiful and amazing!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very nice!
I used to wear a watch at all times, I mean, I am a nurse and it is expected!.!.!.right!? Had a friend tell me that while working overseas, he began practicing a local custom!. They kept a small basket inside their front doors where visitors dropped their watches because time was not important between friends!. My shoes and watch now come off the minute I enter my front door and the watch is now only ever worn at work!.Friends now know without being told to drop their watches as they enter!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm really diggin' this new style!. I think you nailed it!. All that being said, this is really some poem!. It grabbed me by the heart somethin' powerful!. I've been with my wife everyday for over fourteen years except one three week span while we were in the process of moving!. It was horrible!. This poem brought back all those emotions I went through while we were apart!.
No I am not--I have allergies!.
Loved it C!.S!. thanks!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very nice, and I agree with sptfyr, I can feel the touch of a yearning soul in this poem!. Very well-crafted!. I'm new to this form but I really like it!. Thanks for sharing!.

with best wishes,
Lull? Rhymesmith Sonneter Metaphor-coiler
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This form sings, as does your poem!. The more I have seen it done today, the more I love it!.

Sptfyr is an inspiration for bringing classical forms to the Poets of Mars!. The fourth planet will ring with songs of all kinds next yearl!.
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Hooray on 2 counts!
1!. the poem is beautiful!
2!. Seven whole days!!!
Can't come soon enough, hey!?!?
I'm so happy for you!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Two in one day!? What a prolific thing you are!
I'll let the others who know what they are talking about say what you really need to hear, but I shall add one thing,
it touched me!.

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Another beautiful Partenza Represa! I leave for a couple of days and come back to all of these wonderful poems to read!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm pleading with you; please don't go to Mars, we need you here on Earth to remind us how to sing!. Wonderful beyond words!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I don't know if you "did it right"---but that's pretty damned nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Head of the class you go! Great flow!. Compliments!.Www@QuestionHome@Com