Have you been there, have you?

Question: Have you been there, have you!?

Been there!?

Black, blackness, bleak, blackness
comforting, consoling, cooling!.!.!.
calling me, wanting me, I go

Minding no one, I’m fleeing
to darkness, soothing frays
ridding the cacophonies

A balm this blackness holds on me
freeing, yet snaring, pulling
a spiral to a hole, darkness pulls

I feel I shouldn’t care, just go
ride this blackness, ride it hard
enough sunshiny suns, need to run

Yeah sure I will see the light
another cliché to package a mind
labels to chart, pills to fill

But
In the end, the blackness wins
cold solace the graveyard stone
been there, done that, let me out
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Excellent use of the gerund!. Usually, I hate gerunds, but this is an exception!.

The end phrase shows optimism and the struggle against the "blackness" of the Human Condition!. This is the power of poetry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Mate, I invented it!. I had this cloud, see, it was black and heavy and it hovered about a coupla inches off my head!.!.!.I tried sneaking out from under it - but, it knew better than that!. Sometimes, when it was looking around for some-one else to bring under it, I would see a little ray of sunshine, but it soon got back on track!.!.!.!.are you glazing over at this point!? Bet your are!.
Sorry, Neonman - forgetting to concentrate on your poem!.
Excellent stuff
small suggestion - based on my obsessive urge to see rhyme in everything!.!.!.a concluding rhyming couplet (Even old Willie Shakespeare used it)
cold solace the graveyard stone
been there, done that, leave me alone (or all alone)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I've been to the bottom of that black hole
Wishing to die and give up my soul!.
But my guardian angel whispered on high
Go ahead girl if you want to die
But think of the folks you leave behind
What terrible memories will be on their mind
So I started to re-group,let a slither of light shine through
From the warmth of the sun,I began anew
A new day,a new start,I let go of the strife
Beginning once again, the rest of my life!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

!.!.!. and you told me to write brighter stuff!. (sigh) !.!.!.my dark is so dark I suck the light right out of the sun, stick it in a corner, and watch it cower in fear!.

cacophony
–noun, plural -nies!. 1!. harsh discordance of sound; dissonance: a cacophony of hoots, cackles, and wails!.
2!. a discordant and meaningless mixture of sounds: the cacophony produced by city traffic at midday!.
3!. Music!. frequent use of discords of a harshness and relationship difficult to understand!.
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You can get counselling for that or a good exorcise video may do it!.
Deeply written!. I have been sliding around in the dark lately!. I forgot how to laugh (believe it or not)!. This doesn't put the smile back on my dial but it gives me a comparative slant on how "unblack" it has been compared to others!. So thanks for the lesson!.

Hey Hydropro - stop with the paranoia already! He was talkin' to ME!.!.!.!.!.!.!.so THERE! :-p**** :-DWww@QuestionHome@Com

Yeah I been there, and I'm glad I'm not anymore!. Although, I haven`t been here "labels to chart, pills to fill"!.

Neonman, Me gusta tu poema mucho!.

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Yes!. I was the research historian at Mt Washington Cemetery!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

damn emos,
just give up and actually accomplish something!. !. !. Death!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

yup been there!.!.!.!. but I just flipped the light of love from Jesus and mad it all better, or at least gave me the strength to climbout!.!.!.!.

good poem!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Beg your pardon, Sir!? Are you talking to me!? Do you want me to answer to your query!? Again

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Lost, ones hell of their own making, You don't see the light until you see it!.

Kudos, Neon of lights!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Oh yes, been there more than a few times!. Great write, Neonman!.!.!.now let your Neon lights shine bright!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Haven't we all!? Still, the light has more pull when I learn to stand still and listen!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

im listening to Elaine on this one!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

We always get it "in the end"!.

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