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1 Dust In Love


Your whispers touch the innermost means of my soul!.

Your touch is like a gentle breeze from the ocean!.

Your kisses are like rose petals all over my body!.

And your love makes my heart weep for more !.

your smile is a picture without words!.

Your laughter is music unto my ears

Without you I am nothing more then Dust in love!.

Dust in love
2
Lost in sea

My heart is like a ship that sails the waters, my
destination is unknown at this time as I
continue my sail tears fill the decks, days and nights have
gone by I haven't heard from you!. though others pass
me by, but only to see the heart of my ship is lost in sea!.
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Our every word has to mean turth, this poem has so much truth inside, from someone that can express from insdie, and we all have this, it has to come out within us, poetry is from the heart, soul, and mind, no matter the subject matter!. I view this poem as the "wind," like under my wings, I think one is trying to find him/her self too!. God plays a big part in all we say, do, and especially write!Www@QuestionHome@Com

1 would make a good hallmark card, read once then saved in a box somewhere, only to be read in15 years when found again!. Then quickly discarded because it had come from a name you no longer recall!.

poems like 1 are a dime a dozen to everyone but the one you wrote it for!.

Poem 2- good enough, my hair isn't blown back!. I like the Ship Heart comparison!. Maybe work on this one a bit more!. It has some real potential

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Great job, I really enjoyed it!. The rhythm really had me going!.

You should really submit it to http://www!.papertank!.com and see what they think!. I bet you could get a high rating for it on there!Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a such a deep and sad poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i love it love it ok!!!!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com