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Question: What do you think or have to say about my poem!?
Whispers,
Whispers float through the air
Like webs,
LIke silk!.
Words that have been long forgotten
Sit still in the air!.
Begging to be used agian,
Pleading with you!.!.!.
The music to which they belonged
died long ago!.
They desire,
They wish,
to be seen,
to be heard!.
They're asking
for a voice!?
For a reason!.!.!.
a reason to be!.
These words will
trap,
use you!.
There greedy
mouths
will devore you,
The only way to
be saved from
their web!.
Is to give the a reason
a voice to be heard!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
the warm words in your poem are hungry to be uttered on the lips of the beloved, like a butterfly that waits for a bud to be opened and to turn into a beautiful rich scarlet flower!. !. !. beautiful i would say,, the idea is origional and new and the representation is as if "longing" as the meaning !. !.!.as "thirsty" as the goal !.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Eh, I could do better!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I LIKE IT!!!!OMG , its really cool, kinda like my own writing and its really neat!!! it may benefit from a different format, and a few spelling errors, but thats np!!!
:) keep it up!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

beautiful moving breathtakingWww@QuestionHome@Com

movingWww@QuestionHome@Com

very moving!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sixth line from the bottom i think you mean "devour" as in eat up!. the poem is a sincere effort--keep at it!Www@QuestionHome@Com