Any comments, advice, or critiscism for my new poem?

Question: Any comments, advice, or critiscism for my new poem!?

It is called: Love

Everyone has there demise,
And dies

But not everyone feels pain,
As others

That’s why sometimes,
We do the insane

At our short stay,
We Take away others pain

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Seems a bit dark at the beginning and yet, at the same time, it sounds as if you are finding that you have a lot of compassion!.!.!.or that possibly someone has a lot of compassion for you!. It may not make complete sense to me!. I don't really understand what doing the insane and taking away someone's pain have to do with each other but as long as that signifies something for you, it doesn't matter if it makes sense to me!. I write poetry all the time where people go "Huh!?" ;-)Www@QuestionHome@Com

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