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Advice, and Criticism on poem!? What does it mean to you!?

It Is called Dead Letter Child Hood

Have not seen you
In awhile

Lets not make a scene
Smile

You can lean on
In style

We will have fun
Fight of wolverines
Go in time machines

Things will get better

I will be with you
Never grow up
Promise me that

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Grammar: "Childhood", not seperated, "fight off"
I don't understand the verse "You can lean on
In style" Otherwise I really like the concept, maybe a few additional stanzas would make it more comprehensible!. Keep working on it! ^_^Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it, its a bit confusing but i really like it it get a 6!.5Www@QuestionHome@Com