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Question: Please comment/intrepret my poem ' The girl, I knew'!.Please!?
The girl, I knew!.


I light matches to smell the fumes!.
And hurt myself for the girl, I knew!.

I want to live on the moon,
so you can see me at night!.

Even the reddest of rose petals darken!.
Are fingertips of coal really a revelation!?

The winds are drying my water bubbles!.
I can't stop running, I'm dehydrating!.

I wish I could love you better!.
If she would just come back!.



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very good!.!.i als think dark deep poetry is the best!.!. lmao at one comment!.!. poetry is from the soul!.!. u only want somethin shallow & easy in a poem when ur like five!! otherwise why bother criticising somethin u cant understand!.!. dumb cow (not u!.!.the poems great!.!.the commentator in question!.!.)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I am sorry if this is all wrong, but this is how I interpreted it because I experienced something similar!.!.!. to start though, I like this a lot!

Ok!.!.!. to me, there are a lot of pot smoking references:
"light matches," "funes," "live on the moon" (being high!?), "coal" (like a hookah!?), "water bubbles" (a bubbler!?), "dehydrating" (being thirsty after smoking)

It sounds like the guy put smoking above the girl who he no longer as and is realizing it now ("And hurt myself for the girl, I knew"!.!.!.!. or maybe the "I knew" means he knew what he was doing!?) and the line "I wish I could love you better" perhaps means he wishes he had realized what he had before he put other things before the girl!?

Again, sorry if it's all wrong!.!.!. but that is how I took it!. Regardless, I think it is a very nice poem!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm sorry, how bour wrighting something!.!.!.!. less disturbing (NOT being rude) like!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.

The girl i knew wore sweatpents and sports bra,
Now to touch a bug it's against the law!
All's she does is make-up and hair
When she used to give girls like that a glare!.
Now She's not my dream come true,
Now she's not the girl i knew!.

Make it humorous, yet tragic, had a story behind it, but yet mystrious!. Www@QuestionHome@Com