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Question: Were you ever good at hide and seek!?
Leaving for school, I searched all
through the house to say my good-bye,
found sister at mirror, deft last touch to her
lips, as new boyfriend honked from his ride,
"Ask Jay," her curt reply when asked if
had seen or knew where to find our mom!.

Head stuck inside dryer, he hastily pulled
at gym clothes and stuck them in bag!.
"Don't know," Jay mumbled, "maybe
upstairs," and out the door brother ran!.
"Does Dad know!?" I yelled as he rode off
on bike, managed one backward glance,
"He didn't seem concerned when he left!."

I closed the door, looked into emptied home,
though late, decided to go through backyard,
perhaps I'll find her there!. Five dogs jumping
wildly, muddy feet soiling fresh clothes, I
hadn't even made it to first class bell!.

Mom not in sight but I heard strange sounds!.
Garage door closed tight, I used all my twelve
year old might to roll up that rusted mass!. That
smell! Why was engine running all shut up like
this and why was my mom inside!? I opened car
door, she slumped over, nearly to floor, eyes
eerily rolled back in head!. I screamed, no I
cried as I reached inside,
"Mom, I found you!"

She focused enough, eyes back now in place,
in raspy, weak whisper spoke, "I knew it would
be you, if anyone tried, hide and seek
was always your game!."Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
The words, the wound, the "weak whisper spoke"!.!.!.!.


That's poetry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

yes, so much so that they'd give up and forget me hiding there, for hours I'd wait, I'd snicker occassionally at my wonderful technique, til I started getting hungry or had to pee, only to find them eating little debbie snack cakes in front of the TV!.!.they'd been watching for hours!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The words are full of full of desperation and heartache mingled with fear!. They're very moving!. You have opened the curtain and we can see through the eyes of a young daughter who has gone through this far too many times!. Very poignant!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a fine poetic story with many graphic details!.

I believe you have come to the right place after all!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

WOW, very touching and heartbreaking story!. Well written!.
I'm not very good at hiding!. I tried to hide off and on from my husband for 30 years!. he would always find me!.!.The consequences were very high to pay!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i thought it sounded like a real poem and most people have to know alot about names to ever get to see some real poetry!Www@QuestionHome@Com

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But to answer your question yes

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All the time babe!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

yesss!.!.!.iallways found evry1 !Www@QuestionHome@Com

Interesting!. Not what I expected to find when I went to your question!. But no I was not good at hide and seek!. I was always found!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I was hopeless!.!.I always used to let the girls find me though!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

OH! Ma that's terrible!. Big hug to you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Great story ma!. I could see every move in detail!. Love honeyWww@QuestionHome@Com

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you guys play for keepsWww@QuestionHome@Com

Yes I'm a Ninja no one ever could find me =PWww@QuestionHome@Com

why do you do this sh!t to me!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

What was your Mother hiding from!?What was she seeking that wasn't there for her!?A lot more to tell us!.It left me wanting more!.Well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

ok, i wanna know, what happend to the mother!? was it CO poisoningWww@QuestionHome@Com

lol i stink at the game but this poem was well i felt like i could cry Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes I was very good at hiding and good at finding!. You are a seeker!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow!. Well-written, but sad!.

I think maybe you could use articles a bit more in this poem-- it seems a bit choppy-- but otherwise this is a fantastic piece!. Props!.Www@QuestionHome@Com