What do you think? To blind to see what's in front of you?

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The Blind

Oil and water
Miles away
Toil and struggle
Shades of grey

Duty and self
Rage starts to bristle
Battling for right
Unearthing old issues

Mannequin movers
Cookie cut motions
Vying for change
A confounded notion

Red tape disgust
It’s hard to digest
Aligning with the caustic
lead all to regress

Beating a dead horse
Won’t lead it to water
Ignoring the signs
Leads strong to falter

Here stands the leader
With false mitigations
mincing of words
Hiding true retribution

Maybe the battle
Isn’t worth winning
So close to the end
white flag in waiting
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Excellent poetry; it is up to we poets to make a stand and proclaim what so many voices cannot do!. You have taken the challenge and completed it well!.

The only line that I think needs some work is this one:
Aligning with the caustic

It doesn't flow with the rest of the stanza:
Red tape disgust
It’s hard to digest
Aligning with the caustic
lead all to regress
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Wow, strongly depressing!. My question after reading the poem is why use "retribution"!? The meaning of the word brings strong questions that does not seem to be explained!. What does "mitigation" or cure have do with pay back!?
I think intention would fit better with the theme of "The blind", but that's just me!.
But the mood is sure dark, doesn't fit my personality well =)Www@QuestionHome@Com

"Hi!",

I don't think it needs tweaking!. It seems to flow really nicely!. I didn't see any bumps on the way!. It's great!. I think it is perfect the way it is!.I liked it!. Just my opinion!.

WELL DONE!
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yes, I believe I do

"Maybe the battle
Isn’t worth winning"Www@QuestionHome@Com