Do ghosts haunt you in twilight hours? Thoughts of poem?

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HP, this is what happens when I stay up chatting to long!.!.!.

Ghosts at Twilight

Peering in black,
mute living landscape
Ghosts start to dance,
romancing inanimate

3:00 a!.m!. bloodshot
Mind starts escaping
Ballroom awakening
Spirits in spirals

Crawling through walls
Spaces and doors
feast for the blind
An odd spectral mindscape

They dot my eyes
Cross through my tee
Threading peripheral
Ovals blink back division

Caught up in the game,
Of pantomime motions
Haunted wind spinners,
altering my seclusion

Floating in stillness
Jitters need feeding
Heartbeat in flutter
Instead opt for exit

Falling upon cushions
ending these illusions
Static dissolving into retinas
A welcomed dissolution
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I like this one a lot!. What stands out to me most are these sections:

Crawling through walls
Spaces and doors
feast for the blind
An odd spectral mindscape

Caught up in the game,
Of pantomime motions
Haunted wind spinners,
altering my seclusion

Some really nice word choices there!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a delightful, enchanting poem that catches you and never lets go!. The only line that bothered me was the last one -- it should circle back to the first because this must be read more than once!.

Intriguing stanza:

{{{I love this couplet}}}
Falling upon cushions
ending these illusions

{{{This couplet, however falls short of the symmetry of the rest of the poem!. IMO}}} {Opinions are meant to be ignored if they do not meet your ideas on your poem!.}

Static dissolving into retinas
A welcomed dissolution
{{{ Suggestion}}}
Static dissolves into retinas
Welcome, Dissolution
(A slight personification)!.
T!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Makes me feel like dancing, dancing!.!.!. dance the night away!.!.!.!.!.

odd spectral mindscape!.!.!.!.Threading peripheral!.!.!.!.Caught up in the game,
Of pantomime motions
Haunted wind spinners,
altering my seclusion

Very strong visualsWww@QuestionHome@Com