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Question: What do you think about these possible songs!?
"Only when I see him now
do I realize how much i cared
But what did 'we' mean to him
The nothing that's now there

From his nothing you brought me hope
but I couldn't take a chance
Because I might choke
And I'll admit i was a little scared
could my heart ever be repaired!?

But I loved you
I couldn't hold it in
That because of you
I could love again
That without you
I long for your kiss
And now here with you
I can no longer hide this
no longer hide this
feeling of love"

That's the first one

"Where do we go from here
where do we go from nowhere
where do we go from nonexistent
where do we go from here!?

You took my breath away
and never gave it back
this heart filled with love
has grown the deepest of cracks

My feelings grew with every word and
i screamed that i loved you
but you never heard it
this jumble inside me is driving me crazy
you never wanted to call me baby

As rocky as it seemed
you'd convince me
to go ahead and see
what was right in front of me

Congrats you were right, thanks for the help
that was darn good advice
thought you were Mr!. Right, but you were out for yourself
and i had to pay the price
Now was that really nice!?

Well now we're broken
into tiny pieces
like my heart
you had taken
all of me

and now this wreckage
will soon be gone
Like you
That's why i wrote this song
To you"


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow! I didn't know anyone could write songs so well! But both songs need to be a little longer!.!. Besides that they rock! You should get them on the radio! Have your friends look them over and ask them what they think!. I hope I helped!:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Both don't sound like songs!. Do U know why!? Simply, because they lack the Rhythm, the tone flow, needed for a song!. Some lines should 'v been shorter, others longer!.The rhyming is not enough, and what is there sounds enforced enough to break the flow of the meaning!. In sum they don't sound lyrical!. Sorry ! but that is how I felt about it!. U can refine it though, at least by filtering the (shouting) in Ur general tone, and bring (some) metaphor, don't make it plain (rice) dish!.Good luck!.Www@QuestionHome@Com