What do you think? Poem..

Question: What do you think!? Poem!.!.

He sat by the window,

day by day!.

Staring!.

Wishing!.

Hoping!.

Praying someone would notice!.

No one did!.

She was gone;

his memory was shot!.

Slowly,

he was leaving the world!.

Leaving to a new and

brighter place!.

Home!.

Finally!.
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very simple and concrete poem!. needs more details and some subjective material!. it seems like it is very cut and dry!. seems like it should be touching, but does not yet convey alot of emotion!. keep working on it though!.!.!.theres alot of potential!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Powerful!. I'd pull out the line breaks between each line, and make the line breaks at the point where he is going home!. This is just a suggestion for the line breaks, but I hope you can see how grouping your thoughts into stanzas helps your poem!.!.!. which I think is quite good anyway!.

He sat by the window,
day by day!.
Staring!.
Wishing!.
Hoping!.

Praying someone would notice!.
No one did!.

She was gone;
his memory was shot!.

Slowly,
he was leaving the world!.
Leaving to a new and
brighter place!.

Home!.
Finally!.

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touching and goodWww@QuestionHome@Com