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A cup capsizes along the formica,
slithering with a dull clatter!.
A few heads turn in the crowded evening snack-bar!.
An old man is trying to get to his feet
from the low round stool fixed to the floor!.
Slowly he levers himself up, his hands have no power!.
He is up as far as he can get!. The dismal hump
looming over him forces his head down!.
He stands in his stained beltless garberdine
like a monstrous animal caught in a tent
in some story!. He sways slightly,
the face not seen, bent down
in shadow under his cap!.
Even on his feet he is staring at the floor
or would be, if he could see!.
I notice now his stick, once painted white
but scuffed and muddy, hanging from his right arm!.
Long blind, hunchback born, half paralysed
he stands
fumbling with the stick
and speaks:
‘I want –to go to the-toilet!.’

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Hi Edwin Morgan!

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Ultra-modern!. There's a pervading sense of darkness in the poem, but I can't pinpoint it exactly!. Generally a good poem!. It's very, very, literal (but then that might be what you were going for)!. I would add more metaphor somehow if that makes sense!. Don't get me wrong, however, it's a good poem!. Very strong imagery!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow!!.!.!.This is deep!.!.!.It has great imagiry!.!.!.amazing!! I write poems too, but differently!. I love peoples talent and their amazing imagination!.!.!.love it!! Keep it up!.!.!.go get this published!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

All these stupid suck ups
your poem sucks its not ultra modern
It sounds like something written to amuse
four year oldWww@QuestionHome@Com

hahahaha come on dude!.Www@QuestionHome@Com