A new free verse. What do you think?

Question: A new free verse!. What do you think!?

Well, I'm a little uncertain about this one!. I'm not sure how poetic it sounds!. Here it is:

Memory

Just an image
inside your
head!. So
important, who knows
why!?
Without these, what
are we!?
Shells called humans,
no conscience or
soul!. We
cannot have
those
without learning from
past
mistakes!.
If
never forgotten, always
treasured,
you will never
lose touch with your
humanity!.

Kind of long, I know!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Hey really cool!. Haven't read any of your work in a long time!. This poem has an awesomely deep point, like most poems should have, and normally do, but I felt like you didn't live up to the real standards this point could be conveyed poetically with!. It's a nice calm read, it was like a quick breeze passing!. I don't know, I just wanted so much more from it!.
I give it a 5/10 Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like where you have positioned the line breaks, it puts a strange subconscious emphasis that is not present when reading aloud but when reading to oneself it highlights various aspects of the meaning!. Free form is exceedingly difficult, but i think that you have managed to create a truly unique, quite deep poem!. Bravo!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You want to make a subconscious image, but you need to make it flow a bit better!. The breaks in the lines help, but you need something even more new, something that will let my mind sway to the poetry!. E-mail me when you do, bcuz this poem is great!Www@QuestionHome@Com

with poems anything goes!. the only rule is that you can miss spell, not rymn, rymn or whatever!. !. !. it doesn't sound "poetic" but it has it's own rythnm!. Www@QuestionHome@Com