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Question: Critique My Poem: Are You Buying Me A Dress or a Diamond Ring!?
Love is a Game
Come Kiss me honey
Come and show me the money
Are you buying me a dress
Or diamond ring
I love you
And you love me
Come sit on the couch
Do not be shy
Touch me as you wish
Act like big boy
But gentleman
Remember there is
Some boundary
And some limits
So come have some romance
And tell me again
Are you buying me a dress
or a diamond ring!?
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Overall it's good!.

Rhyming honey / money is a bit cliche!.

Rock on though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com