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Question: this poem came to me in my sleep is it good
OK this just came to me while i was half a sleep thinking of my boyfriend
From the day i met you i knew you were special
and hoped that one day you would be mine
you had to be
For years i couldn't think straight
you blocked all my thoughts
you were always on my mind
Every day i longed to hold you
stoke your dark brown hair
whisper sweet words in you're ear and
kiss your tender lips
Its been a year since it happened
a year to the day
you said to me the words that i
said to you so many times in my dreams
is it any goodWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
it doesn't rhyme, but its really deep and it sounds like it came from your heart!.
if you give it to your boyfriend, I'm sure he'll love it!Www@QuestionHome@Com
i dunno i don't really like it!.
it could be because it just came to you when you were half concious, but it just sounds like you were thinking inside the box!.
do you actually want to make something of this poem!? make it more interesting!. it's boring!. get creative and think OUTSIDE the box!. ever heard of similies, metaphors, personification, alliteration!?!?!? that helps!.
it's extremely boring to read a choppy poem about someone's dumb love life!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think it could be more of a song than a poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
it does not rhyme, but everything else is really "awww"Www@QuestionHome@Com
Shows a lot of promise!. Try reworking the last four lines for a better flow!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
its ok Www@QuestionHome@Com
it doesn't need to rhyme
but i love it its sooooo good =]Www@QuestionHome@Com